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by Free Living Life
Here is a poem I wrote last night. It’s a rough draft but it’s one of those rare poems I decided to type up on the computer. I still have to change couple of things on it before I add it to my trusty diary though.
The world is a cruel place,
It’s scratching and biting my face.
For all the obstacles before me I have to embrace,
I feel like a rat running this race.
Fortunately for me things are looking up.
Like a homeless man getting some coins in his cup.
I feel better with the help of my new pup
Fortunately for me things are looking up.
I’m starting to enjoy the birds singing,
Watching kids on the branches swinging
The flowers on trees springing,
And the disappearance of the painful stinging.
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I think your poem would benefit from changing the fourth line in the second stanza. what do you think?
What you are enjoying about life is called the Unitive way of thinking which I just explained in another comment on this blog. You are a woman so this ability to see no separation between you and a little bird is actually natural. I am a man who has learned the Power of Unitive thought. I think it makes me a better man.
Thanks for being you. I will follow your writings.
I love this post 🙂
I promised the other day to give you the URL to my short story as soon as I finished it. I am not a great fiction writer. What I wanted to do was to use a Romance to illustrate how a man can use meditative techniques in a romantic way to release his girlfriend of pain so he can induce the Love and Joy that should be there naturally.
My apologies. I normally write about Debt Cancellation and ending wars and poverty. The previous Romance I wrote was written from a too masculine point of view even though no men appeared in the story. A woman and her daughter were talking about her husband.
Anyway. This is it. http://youarereality.wordpress.com
It has been awhile since you posted an essay or a poem. I just wrote this:
I talked to two babies before they were born. They both said they had been following their mothers around for 2 1/2 years and were tired of waiting. They wanted me to tell these women that they were going to become pregnant really soon.
You can read the rest here:
http://youarereality.wordpress.com/2013/10/14/about-women-and-happiness/